This is the following page from that last sequence. I actually cut down the number of thugs to 3 so I could do some of the major tweaks on this page. The other guy was always superficial, and these next 2 pages IMO, are probably some of my worst panel layouts...they're hard to follow. I really wish I could use my time machine and go back and give myself a copy of Scott Mclouds series of books- aspect to aspect, moment to moment! This is one of those major overhaul pages, but I think it reads much better and the narrative is clearer...let me know if you can tell what's going on in the scene without word balloons.
the original sequence moves along so quickly (which I always liked about the action layouts) and I just assumed he hit the attacker with a backhand punch. I like the panel where Oink grabs him by the hair in the new version, it really connects the moment they lock eyes to the sudden deathblow against the bricks. The ! and "oh shit" in the third and fourth panels are helpful for following along, otherwise I think its quite effective without the word balloons.
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